Dominique+Avolio

You have a really good start here, but i think there is a lot of work to be done. What made you so excited about the shower? Did you have to help a lot with the planning? Tell the story of what happens at the shower. Keep writing! You are running out of time for the quarter. It ends Friday.

Personal Narrative: I woke up with a big smile on my face.Today was my mom's babyshower.I heard talking downstairs.I went & saw 2 of my mom's friends downstairs preparing for the babyshower.The dining room was getting more pink by the minute.The more people came in,the more presents piled the table."We'll be back.We have to go get the cake."Grace said.So while they were getting the cake,i was cleaning the house guarding it from mom at the same time.My rule was that she wasn't allowed in the house utill it was done.After I was done cleaning,i started to decorate the porch.A couple minutes later,they came back with the cake.It was a mothers upper waste with a sash on it that said "its a girl."It was perfect!"We have to go to the dollar store to get some decorations."Okay i'll be here."I said.I was decorating the porch when all of a sudden,mom came swagged out in pink.Pink shirt,pink pants,pink head band,pink sandles.Even her toe-nails were pink!She was just about to go in the house when i stepped in front of her & stopped her."What are you doing Dom?"Mom said."Your not allowed in the house yet until its done."I said.She had that mad,determined face which made me laugh."Well if i cant go in the house,then can you go get my phone." "Okay fine." so I went in the house & there was my mom looking in the window!So, I had to run out & sit her on the steps & give her her phone."I was so close!"She said.Finally,they came back from the dollar store.Soon or later,everyone start filling the dining room.There was exactly 17 people in the dining room.& may I remind you that my dining room is not that big.While my mom was opening her gifts,Grace was saving the bows & ribbons to make a hat.After she collected all the bows & ribbons,she taped & stapeled all them together on a pink paper plate.It looked real crappy,but it worked.Everyone in the dining room //had// to take a picture of mom wearing that flying soucer on her head.We all had a good day today.After the babyshower,everyone said there goodbye's and congrats.it ended around 5:00,so i went outside for a little bit to go see my friends. Dominique- I am excited to have you in this class. It looks like you can be a very good writer. The challenge for you will be to pay attention and work hard to organize your writing. I think you can do it, but you will have to focus. I am looking forward to reading your character sketch.
 * Theres this chain bracilet that my boyfriend had for a long time he said that its very important to him.He gave it to me to keep.One reason why it is so important to me is because its important to him I try not to lose it because its so valuble.another reason why its so important is that its real.If it was fake,I woudnt really care about it that much but since its real,than its real important important to me.It would make me feel real bad if i lost it because its real important.**


 * Thankful Essay:**
 * I am thankful for my grandpa.I love all my family very much,but I love my grandpa the most because he cares about me,hey gives me money,and he spoils me.**
 * I love my grandpa because he cares about me.If i had a graduation,he'd cancel everything just to go see it.If he missed it,he would do everything in his power just to make it up to me.If i needed money for school,he would give me about $20 dollars to last for the week.If I was on the compuer watching funny videos and wanted him to see it,he would stop everything he's doing just to see it.**
 * Im thankful for my grandpa because he gives me money when I need it.Sometimes he gives me money just for fun!Every weekend I spend the night,he gives me money on the sunday.I could just stay on the computer the whole weekend and he will still give me money.Its like he's my own piggie bank.But dont take it the wrong way,I dont use him,he OFFERS me money.Totaly different.**


 * I am thankful for my grandpa because he spoils me for no reason.He treats me like I was still the first grand child in the family.Like I was still the most beautiful baby he had ever seen.He treats me like a queen.He makes sure that my breakfast is always 4 pieces of toast,cut in half,no crust.5 pieces of sausage.He makes sure that im always happy when im there.If i have a frown on my face,he'll stop everything he's doing just to put that smile right back on my face.He makes sure I have everything I want for my birthday & for christmas since the're so close.**
 * If I ever were to lose my grandpa,I would literaly //die.//He is the most best grandpa I ever will have.Thats why I dedicate all my thanks to him!**