Alexus+Mackson

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Monster by Alexus Mackson Is the sceenplay an effective way to tell this story? Why do you think the author chose to use this format? Use examples from the novel to support yourt answer. The author used and effective way to tell the story of steve. The author used this format to enterain the readers, to let the reader get connected to the story, and helps you visualize the book. The author likes to keep the reader engaged and entertained through the whole story. He uses suspense in the story like he keeps you waiting for all of the good parts. Like one of the good parts is like when steve is on trial and like maybe in the beginning you might of taught steve was guilty thern like when you get to the trial you're like well maybe he isnt, then you like get to like the middle then you go back to your other verdict that he is guilty so basically he changes your mind but then the time you get to the end you want to keep reading because you think there is more good parts. Another reason this is effective format is because he lets you get connected while reading the story. Throught the story he gives journal entries during steve's case. He does this to connect to what steve is feeling in his like the one journal entry when he said "i wonder if i really am a monster?" it makes you think like i wonder what he is going through, or when he did those flash backs it made you think he is like another person then he is now so like your a detective like gathering clues to findout if he is guilty before the verdict comes out. Its also effective because the author helps you visualize the story. He uses camera instructions like where they are at and who the camera is pointing to for you can have a mental picture of it. Like when they were in the courtroom when Richard "bobo" Evans was on stand they told you what he was wearing and how he looked so you can probably picture in your mind that he probably was in the crime and another time when they said "(CU) of steve harmon. the fear is evident on his face" they are giving a visual that is is afraid and you can probably picture what his face looks like or how he is sitting and like his expressions like he might be kinda quite or shy. i think this format was very effective well i know it was for me because i was veryentertained, i connected to the story, and visualized it also i hope it was effective to you as it was for me.

Holidays Holidays are celerbrated all around the world in many different ways and has many different traditions but all i know is i am very thankful for the holidays. Why is this because holidays are the perfect time for getting together with family, eating tasteful meals, and getting a little break from life. Family is important to life and i dont really get to see my family but when either their is a death or when the holidays comes around we always get together then. Most of my family is from out of states so i not get to see them on holidays like my aunt she lives in denver, colorado and i no nothing about her and i would like to know a lot more than i know, and my cousins are just every where some are even out of this country but they only come around doing the holidays. I didnt even know my own brother right in front of my face because he lives in texas and i dont get to see him. i love my family and i wish i can see them more but thanks to the holidays i get to see them. Food is the best part of the holidays because we usally dont make extravagant foods on a daily bases but on the holidays it is the best time to eat. I take cooking classes but i dont really get to use them because my mom just tastes it but when the holidays come around i can get my familys opinion on it like this one time when i made homemade made from scratch apple cobbler and my family loved it they thought it was the best dish i ever made. My family is mostly made up of chefs so when holidays come you know what goes down we have divine meals like quiche and lobster. Dont get me started aboutthe smells permeating through the air the smell of ham, mashed potatoes, stuffed lobster and crab cakes is my favorite part of the holidays. Food is the best part of the holidays and i am thankful for the holidays because of that too. Life is busy but during the holidays we get to have a break from all the regular stress of life. School is sometimes stressful when you are constantly worrying about projects and homeworks but during the holidays i just relax and clear my mind of all the drama at school. Also you can use time from the breaks to spend time with family without rushing your conversation.

//School Year// School years are to short. Students often get bored during the long breaks of summer and while no one is at the school the school is not as effective as usual. We should have a longer school year because it would provide more opportunities for students to learn,allows more free time each school day,and it help students progress faster. One reason why the school year should belonger because it gives more opportunities for students learning. if other people need help on a project and we have a deadline foraweek then we wont get as much help, but if we have more time then they can get more help. Also you can learn lots more about things you are learning because you can get tothe nitty gritty of the lesson because you got more time. More times means more opportunities for learning for students. <span style="color: #d115d1; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">Another reason why the school year should be longer because it allows more free time each school day. Instead of children being at home stuck in the house doing homework they can be outside so if they grt their homework done in school then they can be outside and be active instead of in the house. free time gives you time to review and give you time to chill and relax with friends. <span style="color: #d115d1; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">Last reason why it should be longer because it helps students progress faster. If they get done faster then they can get good grades because they will have more time to do assignment and complete them. Progressing faster would help class of being smaller becasue if alot of people fail it will make the classes bigger and it wouldnt help them learning because the teacher would have to many people to focus on. More time helps students progress faster. <span style="color: #d115d1; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 160%;">Instead of people being at home playing video games and picking boogers we can be at school gettting more oppurtinities for learning, allows free time at the end of the school day, and it helps us progress faster.

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<span style="color: #ff00ff; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 170%;">**//The perfect day was a very warm and sunny july day. The best day for swimming just turned into the best day for drowning. How did my whole world just change in the snap of a finger?//** ======

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**//<span style="color: #ff00ff; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif;">Well when i came home from school it was a very normal day,i came home i did my homework then i ate a snack but i was wrong when i came home i saw suitcases packed in the living room on the couch..At first i thougt we were going on vacation because the day before my mom said we might be going on vaction pretty soon. "Hey mom where are we going." "We arent going anywhere why would you say that," she screamed from the top of the steps. "Well who's bags are these then?" "They are your father bags." "Then how come he gets to go on vacation and we dont," " I thought you were still going to be at school when this happened but since your not i wil tell you why he has his bags packed. Well your father has found a new job in Maryland so he will be moving to Maryland. "WHAT, why cant we go." "Well your father has found a new life we are still apart of it but he needs to go get this job to support you and your brothers and sister." I ran upstairs and I tried to stop my father from leaving. It didnt work, my father was done packing and start explaining more about why he was leaving. " Well i guess i will be leaving now and don wory kido you will be uo in maryland in 2 months." My dad started the car and honked the horn before he left. That night i worried alot about what had happened. //** ======

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<span style="color: #ff00ff; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 170%;">**//Months and days went passed and i still was worried about my father. I didnt talk to anyone i was so depressed, i alwas thought my father would be there and in the years i needed him but when my mom gave me the phone and my father was on it the worry changed into relief until he told me that his house had caught on fire and i wouldnt be able to come down. I was shocked when my father told me that and i asked if my brother was ok and his girlfriend was alright and when he told me that i felt alot better than before. When i thought that this day couldnt get any better it did my father had told me he had bought a house that morning for i can come down as promised. At that time my heart exploded in joy and when my dad told me that i was coming down tommorrow it wasnt intentional but I dropped the phon and ran upstairs and start packing. That is when i knew i could always trust my father because he could of lived with is friend until he found a better house than what he got right now and just save up money than taking it out is savings.//** ======

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<span style="color: #ff00ff; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 170%;">**//In the morning bright and early he took me to Maryland for te first time and when i got to his house i really knew i could always trust my father.//** ======

**//<span style="font-family: Georgia,serif;">My Mommy //**
**//<span style="font-family: Georgia,serif;">My mom looks just like me because we both have redddish brownish hair with brown eyes and she is 5'6. She is a very loving person because when it comes around christmas time she always gets me alll the things that I asked for and if you doesnt she gets it later that year. She has always been my hero like when i was at the store I was at the cash register and i didnt have a $20 to buy the rest of my scool clothers so she just bought it for me. // //<span style="font-family: Georgia,serif;">She always cooks weird extravagent foods like one day for halloween she wanted to make a halloween themed dinner and she had these things called the walking dead. //**

=** Boxing **=
 * //Boxing is a very fun sport to watch and it has a very interesting history and boxing today HAS YET TO COME!!!!// //The history of boxing goes back farther than you think.// **
 * //Boxing was founded by the greeks and the romans. It became an organized sport in 1888.Olympic stle boxing was organized as one of the first sports in the AAU(Amateur Athletic Union).It was once called pugilism.// **
 * //Today boxing is very different than back in the olden days.In 2012 women boxing will be in the Olympics.Andrella wasson won the second world title for team U.S.A in 2010.December,26 in the U.S.A is the official day of Boxing Day.Europe has more fans in boxing than in the U.S.A becausae the U.S.A has a lot more options in sports than in Europe.Woman boxing was once banned in many nations.// **


 * //By: Alexussssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss// **

Boll's Quotes <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 200%;">**//Alexus- I really like your work here so far. The intro is really good and you have done a good job with quotes and transitional phrases. I think it is a really powerful part of your narrative when you say "Months and day went passed and I still worried about my father..." I think you could elaborate on this feeling. This could be a really strong internal conflict in your narrative. You are a great Writer. Keep going.//**

<span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 200%;">**Alexus- You are a good writer. In this case, it appears we could follow the format on the board for a more organized paper. I like some of your description and your explanation of how your mom gets her point across. I think you have a mixture here of a story and a direct character sketch. If you want to tell the story about your mom arguing with the school, that is fine. There should be more description of the scene and the event and the way that your mom argued her point. If you want to characterize her directly, pick the physical description, trait, support, trait support, conclusion model. Let me know if you have questions.** <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 200%;">**Good start.**


 * <span style="color: #ff0000; font-family: Impact,Charcoal,sans-serif; font-size: 200%;">Oops... forgot to put this in the "boll notes" section. Great job with this! You showed that you understand the 5 paragraph essay as it was taught here. I would look at your notes to see what can be added to the introduction and the conclusion. THere could be some use of "attention getting" tactics in the intro. Otherwise, great job. **